The starters gun went ‘Bang’ and there was dust all around me as the other competitors raced off and left me behind. I pushed off the ground and being pumping my arms . The area around me was rocky so I had to watch where I put my foot, one bad move and I would twist my ankle and be out of the race. I was concentrating on the person in front of me that I didn't realise how close I was to the edge of the cliff, until it was too late, my foot slipped and a rock underneath me fell into the roaring, turbulent waves below I tripped and stumbled and lost my balanced I hanged on to the cliff for dear life.
Thursday, 2 August 2018
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Hi Grace,I really liked your 124 word story I thought it was very cool I also liked how you made it feel real because when I read the story it felt like I was there, in the race.Next time maybe you could check over your work and make sure it makes sense.
ReplyDeleteHi Grace wow that was such a interesting story and I am not just saying that to be nice. My favorite part was when you slipped and the waves were crashing beneath you it made my heart beat very fast. Your descriptive words were very interesting it made me want to read more.
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ReplyDeleteHey Malia
Thank you for your lovely comment, it’s great that you thought that you were actually there, it made me feel really great inside. I hope to see you comment more on my blog.
Grace